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Jason Brooker's avatar

This is haunting but beautifully written.

Just one suggestion.

You know there is a feature to publish in poetic style so that your line breaks remain as you intend.

The way that this is set out makes it slightly difficult to read because the lines and phrases are not broken up like a poem.

safia Ijaz's avatar

Thank you for reading and for the lovely feedback. I'm glad the poem resonated with you. And thank you for the suggestion too. I didn't realize the formatting affected the reading experience that much. I'll definitely look into the poetry style feature and use it in future posts. I appreciate your help.

Kelly Trost's avatar

Oh, Safia, this is heavy. ...Heavy because you have an ability to imbue your words with such profound effect. You are STILL improving as a poet and as a writer and I would have not thought this of a writer/poet of your calibre.

But I wish this poem was not a reality, my friend. Sending love and light...

safia Ijaz's avatar

This means more to me than you know. Coming from you, it genuinely does. And yes, some poems come from places I wish didn't exist, but maybe that's exactly why they need to be written. Thank you for the love and light, I am sending it right back to you.

V S Uma's avatar

Hey Safia

Wow this was so amazing to read

As always I love the way you write

With a pinch of suspense, a pinch of scare

Like a nice masala chaat

👌🏽👌🏽👌🏽👌🏽👌🏽

💜☮️💜☮️☮️

safia Ijaz's avatar

Thank you soooo much sweet yara for your support and love

Stephanie C. Bell's avatar

Our culture tends to groom us for this kind of "love" which isn't love at all. Thank you for writing about it so that true love can bloom and flourish!

safia Ijaz's avatar

Thank you so much for understanding the main point of this post Stephanie dear